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Kimberly Rodarte
United States, PA

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Billy's Gas

I see him behind grease-smudged windows
birthmark, red face
skin puckered like a burn victim.
"It's just the way he was born," Mom said.

We drove into the full service station.
My brother and I discussed his face
one side like Freddy from Nightmare on Elm Street,
the other human.

Billy outgrew his overalls last year.
He motions us to the first dusty pump.
No one else is here.

Dad rolls down the window, puts a ten
into Billy's calloused hands.
There's grease under his ragged nails.

He pumps, wipes his forehead,
smears oil like an Indian painted for war.

Little store has antifreeze, washer fluid, and snacks,
potato chips with the expiration date worn off.

"2.34, sir, thank you. Here's for the kids."
Dad hands back two dum dum lollipops,
cherry, like Billy's birthmark.

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rosysophia Comment by: rosysophia - 2006-09-24 20:30
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Nice poem, but I think the periods at the ends of each sentence kind of take away from it's strengths.

Also, my childish mind can't help but twist up the title. Perhaps you should just call it "Billy"? Hehe. Seriously, it's just... I read it and that's all I can think about. *shrugs*

I really like it, though. Good imagery. Nicely done.
Comment by: - 2006-09-17 23:06
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This poem is a natural- like a bloodhound the way its brought full-circle back to the red mark and the candy for the "kids"- also naturally musical and folksongy simple yet with deft crafting as in the total being 2-3-4.
You're on to something here!
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-09-17 13:21
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There are a few spelling errors a quick read through will fix, but this is a great poem about a specific place and time. It is like looking at a picture then writing about it. I did this in one of my poems (who knows which one). I saw a picture and tried to write what I thought the person in it was feeling and how other people would feel looking at it.

A great step away from the mundane.**
suleem Comment by: suleem - 2006-09-17 11:51
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this is so sureal. I felt I am there in the car. Great discription
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