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Picoreturns
Picoreturns
United States, TX, Webster

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mistakes

if it be that this is penned towards my direction
i could wander sadly in a certain way
cast an echo into the voids before my dejection
truly within the outer limits of who i thought i might become
resides, survives, devides this thing of putrid design
crafted, born and spit
for me, somthing of this quality
something showing of even less in quantity
can bare to read of purity loosing its light
conviction pushes_my resolve it twitches
freedom from out this broken form
wretched lies you spit on me
for if you are what you say you are.
selfishly i am but dust,
foolishly feeding on the shadows
of the room within your locked doors

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Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-03-28 00:55
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I like this very much. Great imagery and rhythm to this poem.
Good work

Anne
Picoreturns Comment by: Picoreturns - 2006-09-18 13:26
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Thank you for your comments, 'PS'
psgri2003 Comment by: psgri2003 - 2006-09-18 08:24
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i like the rhythymn in this and the way the poem seems to pivot on the ball of its foot, there are some great lines and soem wonderful imagery that the structure helps to drive home.
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