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Suffocation
Death has come to life -
It permeates every pore,
Clinging to every cell like smog.
The mind is ambushed
By thoughts of him;
His death,
The last minutes
Recounted to old friends.
There is no anecdote to chill
The sudden blow -
Nervous laughter
Masks a grief so deep
Its borders have yet to show their lines.
N.B. This poem is written as a muse on grief, sudden death in that limbo time before a funeral when no-one knows what to do with themselves but feels unable to vent their grief. I would be interested to hear other interpretations of it.
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Comment by: - 2007-07-08 16:46
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I felt exactly what you wrote when my twin sister died. I knew the minute she died, although I didn't find out until a day later. I just knew. The lack of breathing of my own, the lack of feeling real, acting but not knowing, seeing the body, and the last memories going through your mind as the casket is closed to no longer see what you will miss the rest of your life.
Yes, a very well written poem on the realities of the feelings of death of someone you know. The panic, the zombie like trance... but time does help, not always heals completely, but only mends and at times re-opens when you see a picture, or hear a laugh...
thank you for such a well written poem both in content and structure. |
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| i took it as someone realising they are facing death and recountering their last emotions, thoughts fears. the image of someone on their deathbed just filled my mind while i read it. it's clever. keep it up |
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| I tried to take you up on that offer, another interpretations, but I can't write of this right now. But When I can, I will post it & leave you a message. |
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| very thought provoking |
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| Great work here Frances. I know this is a poem of observation written in the moment, but i think if you could flesh it out a bit more it can benefit the piece. Just my opinion tho. Nice one. - Gavin |
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