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skettio
Kimberly Rodarte
United States, PA

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Sicily

In Sicily a man jumped into an erupting volcano.
He said the Gods made him do it,
as his sandals started to melt into lava.
People called him a hero and held celebration.

I wish I knew if he did it for something he believed in
or just to prove that he could.

I found myself dying for everything I didn't believe in,
not to prove anything, but because I didn't trust myself.
I could feel the lava's heat on my toes,
even wearing three inch heels.

People thought I was blind,
but it was just easier not to see.

The ash was getting in my eyes
and I wanted to close them tight,
so that everything else would disappear
instead of being blown to pieces.

I wonder if the man from Sicily ever felt like a riddle,
or if he never smiled.
What did one penny say to the other?
Let's get together and make cents.

I'm finally starting to make sense again.
I'm smiling and I hope my face freezes this way,
like my mother used to threaten
when I stuck out my tongue.

They say Sicily is beautiful,
sights that you've never seen,
but just don't look down in the volcano
if you think you might jump in.

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normal jeane Comment by: normal jeane - 2007-02-07 12:03
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I really like this...a lot. I do think it could be strengthened with the changing of a few words. You might consider how to tell the story without so many "I"s. all in all, I enjoyed this poem. You have such potential and it shines in this work!!
greensburgzine Comment by: greensburgzine - 2006-12-01 13:21
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I like this poem a lot, and would like to ask you to consider submitting it to Greensburg magazine. Our first issue comes out on Valentine's Day and I think this would be a nice fit. Take care!
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-10-07 13:49
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Loved the joke (going to steal it).

I think this paints a very insighful self portrait of many people.
It IS so much easier to run away then face what has been buried in our minds. Sometimes the reality is more painful then we can bare, so we forger, close our eyes, pretend...anything not to remember.

A very strong write.**
jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2006-10-07 06:42
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i knew
as soon as i saw the title
sicily
this was going to be different
and it was

I found myself dying for everything I didn't believe in,
not to prove anything, but because I didn't trust myself.

where did that come from?
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-10-01 12:44
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I really enjoy the premise of his piece as others have before me. I think I would also be a scaredycat and unable for the sake of belief to jump into the turbulant flames below. The way you have written this piece is almost in a narrative style like a story is being told. I think that this style is really effective how a tale can be incapsulated within a short number of lines and how the poem is finished off with a personal reflection of being unable to follow through with what the man with the sandals had just done.
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