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Third Rock Slumber
It's the end of the world on Saturday night!
You wake up, well dressed, for Judgment Sunday morning.
The Garbage Can Globe transforms landfill sphere to offer
the natives some hide n' seek fun.
We were sitting on your roof when we saw the great flicker,
like a camera taking snapshots of the Earth.
Now fast-blast gusts go tsunami-fied rivers
And neon rock slime goes mountaintop explosion.
If you thought life was boring with it's small town non-happenings,
Then it's big, madhappy smiles for the great sight that's coming!
Will the armor core press get their last great story
or quit the ratings battle to see through eye, not lens?
It's fireworks bonanza, inspired Poet's stanza!
It's anarchy and love and peace
and death and life and no more lease!
It's the end of bills and oil spills
The end of days and sunshine rays!
It's all or nothing and both at once
The end of inmates counting months!
Take your photos all in vain,
Last darkroom perished in the flame!
Write your poems in your mind,
'Cause papers burn to leave no sign.
It's the end of this rock and it's venomous beasts,
'Till the afterlife calls, may we rest in peace!
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This was like running with wings on the back of your trainers, along some dusty abandoned highway, with the snakes leaping to shoot venom at your dangling shoelaces, while you rose just high enough and fast enough to skim the tarmac, and smirk at the venomslingers shooting at you.
I got a whole barrel of images when I read this, and it felt like I was running when I read it.
Don't ask. I do interpret things strangely, but I did enjoy this so much =D Wicked piece of writing. |
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Comment by: - 2006-10-31 14:45
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| ;) nice |
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| The latter parts of the poem are quite thought-provoking. |
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| ROCK AND ROLL! Sorry. couldn't help myself. A nice screaming rhythm to this, with biting lyrics (well, they feel like lyrics, anyway) and a lot of fun. Perhaps a little repetitious in theme, but very enjoyable. |
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One of the "attractions" of SI is that it tried to replicate the print medium submission format, so you don't get mush chance to foramt the way you'd like. Think of how it would look in notepad as a .txt file, and then realise that they're not using a fixed width font.
Having said that, you can do a bit of formatting - upload the piece, then use the formatting feature on the uploaded version - it seems to work, if you have the patience. |
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