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Comment by: Cherley Online- 2008-02-25 08:20
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| I felt this was marvelous. I hadn't read your bio so I didn't know your age as I read it, but now I'm even more impressed. I could see it being read aloud at a coffee house somewhere. People sitting around comtemplating why things happen in life. I don't usually have these kind of images as I read poems, but you did a great job with this one. |
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| I like the repitition, it adds to the emotions of the poem.It should be insanely, or insanity though not insaness.Overall very powerful piece from such a young person.Keep writing. |
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Comment by: sudipal - 2007-02-22 12:42
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very scary, very moving.
(side note: my birthday's also in May, though I'm a few years older than you.) |
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Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-10-29 13:24
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| Thank you. (I turned 12 this May.) |
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| You are eleven, and you wrote this? I am so blown away by your maturity and talent. Although, it kind of concerns me that you would be able to pull up such deep feeling at such a young age. It actually sounds as if the writer is having an anxiety attack. I guess the things that you read are good for inspiration and knowledge, but be careful that you don't become overwhelmed. You have a beautiful talent. |
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