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ooSCOTToo
ooSCOTToo
United Kingdom

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Brian Junior - Age 6

Bang goes the gun
Bye goes the love
Beauty once shone
Bruised and torn

Blood
Bloody blood
Blood over the
Boards, over
Board

Brian was his name
Brute force he used
Beauty lay dead
Blatantly dead

Blame the love
Blame the dead
Blame the gun
But
Blame not the son

Blame Brian
Brian's Bullet

Brian's Bullet made Mummy dead

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Cujo Comment by: Cujo - 2007-06-01 02:53
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Really terrific work here, you've structured this really well and its flow is great. I loved the end sentence :)
Khema Comment by: Khema - 2007-04-22 15:01
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oh my....i would be curious to delve into the inspiration for this....nicely done. K~
ally19ky Comment by: ally19ky - 2007-02-13 14:54
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very hard hitting. makes a real impact. i love it.
DreamerLady101 Comment by: DreamerLady101 - 2006-10-30 08:57
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very nice, interesting poem, sad poem. Hope you upload more of your poems and stories soon. Keep writing!
KeepBreathing Comment by: KeepBreathing - 2006-10-04 17:46
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Nice. Very intriguing style. I like it a lot and hope to read more soon.
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