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mejaflora
Ida Gul
Singapore, Singapore

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falling in love

He met her by the pool
She stood there so beautiful
With eyes the color of gold
And a smile that made him bold

He fell in love with her
That beautiful stranger

He thought she was a goddess
Filled with innocent kindness
Like the gentleness of win
Devoid of any sin

He fell in love with her
For him, life could not get better

He followed her everywhere
Wherever she was, he was there
He listened to her spoke
He waited till she woke

He fell in love with her
His love only got deeper

One day outside her window
He watched with eyes aglow
She was naked in plain sight
His passion she did ignite

He fell in love with her
Now she made him burn like fire

He watched her sleep at night
And with her breath, he barely sighed
As his love dreamt dreams of light
Not knowing his thoughts of night

He fell in love with her
He swore his love is forever

Finally he waited in her yard
Wanting to have her so very hard
Never had he been so eager
When he saw her came nearer

He fell in love with her
Now everything seemed so clear

But what he saw made him cry
She came home with another guy
They danced into her bed
And didn't even wait

He fell in love with her
But now his love became his fear

His heart torn and rudely broken
He felt he was finally awoken
To him, that man had no right
To touch his woman night

He fell in love with her
So much now she's his terror

Finally the man went away
And he crept to where she lay
Slowly he touched her face
And fingered her soft white lace

He fell in love her
Now it was time to be her lover

He ripped her of her covers
Eyes widened at her nakedness
She woke and saw his face
And screamed to find her place

He fell in love with her
Now she would be his forever

She struggled as he grabbed
And cried when he slapped
He tore her soul apart
And tore her skin inside

He fell in love with her
Lust was there with his anger

He felt a raging fury
And his mind could no longer see
That he once loved this woman
Now she only looked like a demon

He fell in love with her
That made him a vicious killer

He swore and took a knife
Stabbed her heart, ended her life
He wept when he saw her blood
Yet he continued to stab her heart

He fell in love with her
Now she was his in life and after.

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foxfyre Comment by: foxfyre - 2006-10-25 21:22
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it does remind me of a song...wow...so vivid and so raw in it's emotion!
Violet Blue Comment by: Violet Blue - 2006-10-07 07:45
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Hey Ida, this seems like a song - or more like an operatic tragedy. When people start to see the person they love as an object then you have to worry. The rhyme was a little forced at times but I love the tragic sentiment of this. Another criticism: It could be shorter I believe, but that's your choice, I guess. Thanks.

Paul x
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