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Telephone Joy Club
Pow-wows dressed in camouflage
Let the Spirit play
Movies never end
Sleeping on the couch cushions
Flickers are for dreams
Paycheck made it home
Water, power, rent all paid
Boil brains for lunch
Breakfast on the belt
Countertop of oranges
Midnight was a blast!
Cigarette is peace
Heart attack from "Joy that kills"
Cigarette is peace.
Rain rolls off the roof
A waterfall for city kin
Beating on the ground
*I'll probably be adding more to this.
*The title of each Haiku is the first line of it.
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Nice collection of Haikus. Maybe if you would change the alignment of the stanzas you could even get a whole poem built with haikus-JMO.
My favorite haiku was also the second one.
Thanks for the read.
firstly : english haiku is 5-7-5 but it takes the beauty out of it by extra words and then it really isn't anything but telling... and you want it to leave some imagination! :)
and the title : even if it is more then one haiku - it's still haiku, not haiku's! :)
just being nice! and helpful!
anyhow :
I liked this one the best :
Movies never end
Sleeping on the couch cushions
Flickers are for dreams
I hope it's okay if I play with one : i'm going to play with this one if that's okay to show you less is more! :)
Breakfast
of oranges :
Midnights a blast!
anyhow : it's not perfect, but it's just to give you an idea that less is better - you get more of the blunt pow and more to play with in your head!
