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tinaleigh120
Christina Pritchard
United States, Florida, Boca Raton

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Jerk

You are a real Jerk!
Made me think you were crushing-
Yeah, uh just my little heart.

I guess I brought this upon myself,
I knew how you were
And yet I went along-
Oh man, was I foolish!
But either way-
What you did was wrong.

Never again will you affect me.
I've had worse men try.

That was so low-
You sure missed out
For I am a real woman
And now,
You will never know
What one feels like.

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simowierdo Comment by: simowierdo - 2006-09-27 18:04
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mmmhhhhmmm...nice...and this is a very common problem...nice write.
Comment by: - 2006-09-27 07:42
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This is really good!!!! I really loved this!!! The flow was so great I didnt even stop to see the typo that RosySphia pointed out! That was amaxing! Great job!
rosysophia Comment by: rosysophia - 2006-09-26 19:47
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Interesting style. Not really my cup of tea, but you've got something here. I would suggest more imagery; it adds feeling.

"For I am a real woan"

I'm sure you meant to say "woman" there. ;-)
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