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ardenbaino
arden baino
Philippines

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Rat Race

I participated in numerous rat races, it was amazing that after winning most of them
I found out that I am still a rat, Ugly and fat and worst I am always being chased and eaten by a gargantuan cat. I don't know if I am going to stop and just rot or climb to the top and smoke pot. I don't want to live inside a rattle snake's stomach either and get masticated by its intricate digestive musculature. Mouse traps and rat poisons are my abattoir. Contraptions engineered and concocted to facilitate my early demise. I don't want to kick the bucket too early. I want to win more rat races so that someday, I might become a big cat myself. Evolution is possible. Rats can become cats if they will only believe. Metamorphosis through mutation is feasible. I can be better than the laudable Ninja Turtles head honcho called Master Splinter, I'll form an intricate cranial architecture teeming with intellect and erudition. All things said, I've ranted and raved only to wake up from a subterranean profoundly cavernous unfathomable slumber and realizing that I am human again.

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ardenbaino Comment by: ardenbaino - 2007-06-27 20:06
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Because i created this one when i was feeling metaphorically like a rodent
hatchzel Comment by: hatchzel - 2007-06-24 05:17
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I laughed so hard in this boring sunday morning... love it esp about master spinster:) Great work and great style. I look forward to reading more works and i think you should watch the movie
Rattoitoine. (correct me if i misspeled it) THanks for this read, its on my shelf now
rabableo Comment by: rabableo - 2007-03-13 09:42
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Very different style to what is normally written and I like it. This is very well executed.
Good work.
lezah Comment by: lezah - 2007-01-29 12:32
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The rodent in you is striking back...

Liked the sounds in this - had to read a couple of times to get the flow and rhythm due to its layout, but once achieved could roll along.

Lots of thoughts in this, the wanting to win the races and then the realisation that it's not all it's cracked up to be...but still that desire to become the master Machiaevelian manipulator of merchandise. Mwahahahahaha!

Enjoyed for its quirkiness. I love being a quirk.
ElSomnoliento Comment by: ElSomnoliento - 2006-11-28 15:23
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Mickey Mouse?? is that you?? --kai, harharhar
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