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wellnessthruplay
Jodi Eyraud
United States, CA

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I will always wait

She sits alone
inside her mind,
a dark corner,
hard to find.
Closed off to normality
of daily life

She hides from me
wanting to be alone'
'but she trembles alone',
fears of being
swallowed whole
.
Asphyxiating
from the dark,
she struggles
to her feet, comes to me,
withered and weak

I stroke her face,
our eyes meet.
I pull her close,
we dance in light,
smothering fears

I look down at her,
she is dancing on
my feet, I call
to her, she steps
from me, stands for a
moment, as if complete.

Her eyes fall,
darkness has called
'come back to me'
I stand in angst,
afraid, incomplete
hoping our eyes
will soon again meet

6/28/o6

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Parthena Comment by: Parthena - 2007-06-27 16:06
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Very visual and emotion-provoking. I agree that the quotes disrupt the flow. I'd take them out or add one to each stanza. I like the way the piece leaves one wondering whether the poet is referring to a lover, an aging parent, a child or the inner self.
Fouchega Comment by: Fouchega - 2007-02-06 02:33
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This has such a hauntingly beautiful quality about it. Very moving and powerful.
Christina1975 Comment by: Christina1975 - 2006-12-20 21:33
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Very touching.... needing to be saved, but unable to be rescued...
Christina
Sophia Comment by: Sophia - 2006-10-27 01:51
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THis is heartbreaking at times,and there are so many lines here I'll want to re-read and remember.
Comment by: - 2006-10-13 17:07
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I do not remember what I said in my comment but I do remember the feelings I had of how much this poem meant to me right now. My mother has dementia and I can relate to much here. I will always remember my good memories of her. She was a strong and wonderful woman. You have helped me remember many nice things with your poem. Thank you very much, Jodi.

Enrique
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