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Pull back the curtain
Drench me with the truth
While I shower you with love
Your love comes with conditioner
You say you love me
You just want to drown me
Clean away the real me
Until all the fight in me is drained
I want to wash my hands of you...
Wash...and go.
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I loved the line Teri has picked - "your love comes with conditioner"
and the finality in the ending. No minced words. The message is clear. Nice work.
Cat's comment is perfect. Don't you love those who try to change us when "us" is what they first fell in love with? Your poem made me just realize something: I was always told I was too picky. I wasn't too picky. I merely didn't feel like changing anyone! Thanks for your poem. Great work! T.
What a beautiful metaphor that speaks of the way some people always seem to try and brainwash the other into being their ideal partner, while at the same time relating it to the way the media tries to brainwash us with slogans.
