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My Melody and I
Any time I find for me
Is stol'n away so easily
By thought of how we ought to be
And wonder over why
I can't seem to make you stay
You can't love me anyway
That's why every time I walk away
I'm someone else's guy
My Melody and I
Spend hours on the stage
Hidden in the dark
Deaf to all the world
You think you're my girl
Oh, but you don't see
The wonder that's with me
My Melody and I
Now don't be mad at Music
She never did you wrong
I'm the one who played you
With every single song
Baby you can leave me
But I won't miss a beat
Beautiful you were, rest assured
But Melody, she makes my life complete
My Melody and I
Spend hours on the stage
Hidden in the dark
Deaf to all the world
You think you're my girl
Oh, but you don't see
The wonder that's with me
My Melody and I
I know that she don't look the part
But every key unlocks my heart
Only strings and sound inside
But that's what keeps me satisfied
I tried to hide our love affair
But Melody was always there
We sang our secret with every lullaby
My Melody and I
Every small mistake I'd make
Was such a major thing to you
Melody would understand
She'd make it minor
Whenever I was blue
My Melody and I
Spend hours on the stage
Hidden in the dark
Deaf to all the world
You think you're my girl
Oh, but you don't see
The wonder that's with me
My Melody and I
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Comment by: Valerie - 2007-11-03 13:26
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The poem is lovely, and very nicely written. The only thing that I can critique on, is the repetition, e.g.,
you - 16 times
I - 15
the - 14
my - 12
melody -11
and -10
but - 8
to -7
me - 7 etc. However, there are times when we just can't rid ourselves of "the" and "and"s because without them, the lines would become wooden, still they should be at the minimum, if possible. |
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| Beautiful. I don't think you need to change this a bit! I love it! Lovely! :-D |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-09-30 10:59
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I really liked this. A very lyrical poem (of course) with you and your melody. I love how you wrote of your romance with music just as a poet might write about their love affair with words.
A great write.** |
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