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PrometheousUnbnd
Alfred Derro IV
United States, Pennsylvania, Harleysville

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Of Ring and Rose

The rose becomes the irony when I give it to you; it's pretty, if not perfect, but pretty good will do; when everybody knows that only rose is pure while true. So what am I in imperfection, else dishonest too? And every time we kiss, our lips tell more and more a lie, 'cause yours don't say you love me, and mine won't say goodbye.

Ring along with rose, even less a thing maintain, for what ever endured the more for marriage with a chain? And who so bold to hold fast to that lasting source of pain but I, and would I blame you for yourself, as you are sane? And every time we kiss, our lips tell more and more a lie, 'cause yours don't say you love me, and mine won't say goodbye.

Now what ne'er had a real beginning must find end; and make me, to me, less to you, so all your inj'ry mend; and leave alone a lover in love still; and name him friend. I'll leave you and your choice alone with time in thought to spend. 'Cause even in our final kiss, your lips told mine a lie. They weren't sure they weren't in love. And they wouldn't say goodbye.


Oh what a tangled web we perceive, when we want so much to believe.

'¦Am I loved, as I love you?
'¦Or do lying lips tell me true?

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Zed Comment by: Zed - 2008-01-21 09:26
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This is impressive poetry... at it's best. I love the form, the subject I relate to and the powerful imagery.
Thank you!
jonsonkuhn Comment by: jonsonkuhn - 2007-10-15 17:16
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I especially enjoyed the imagery. And the lines are really clever - "and even in our final kiss, your lips told mine a lie." That's really good. Well done. Take care.

-Jonson Kuhn
Comment by: - 2007-07-09 18:32
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Powerful imagery with the roses, kisses... your kiss says you love her, her kiss says she is lying to you... the repetative of the same line at the end of each verse struck the meaning clearly into the readers mind. The twist on, the tangled web, I enjoyed what you did with that and your ending. Captivating!
writergrlxo Comment by: writergrlxo - 2007-06-27 16:50
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This is more interesting than any lovesick puppy poet back in the 1800s. Or at least to me anyway. Good job. :)
ErinJane Comment by: ErinJane - 2007-05-08 10:04
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Best poetry I have read on this site as of yet. Inspiration?

I am overwhelmed.
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