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Where No-One Can Find Me
I can't get away, cause there's nowhere to go
But I'm headed off, so watch out below
I'm falling, and heaven is calling
I just want to escape
To some far away place
Where no-one can find me
And I'm far beyond my mistakes
I can't let it out, cause it never was in
But I'm cutting loose all over again
I'm crying, and heaven is dying
I just want to deny
That your love ever died
Where no-one can find me
And I'll never again say goodbye
I can't just forget, cause I never remembered
But I'll still imagine we're back in September
I'm smiling, and heaven is shining
I just want to relive
All those moments again
Where no-one can find me
And the world's not in pieces yet.
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Comment by: JPM - 2006-11-15 12:49
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Ya it good thatnk you writer for this poem. i will read it again and again."and i'm far beyond my mistakes" here you are talking to me.
big up to you. |
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I love this piece. The rhyming works well, while expressing your true emotions without too much.. fluff (LOL), couldn't think of another word for it. We all feel this way, some of the time, when we just want to escape feeling, hurting, and trust me, I too have wished not to be born..to be where I was before, at peace.....
One thing though,...the last sentence kind of hiccuped with the word "yet"...maybe you can find another to fit in better with the rhyming scheme. Just my opinion though. |
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