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The Choices We Make
Invert, disguise and
Compromise
These choice aren't always
Black and white
They come inside and,
Blur the lines and,
Now I don't know left from right
What's wrong and right?
I just want to do what's right
But it isn't black and white
And when I choose the white
It might turn out to be gray
And if I choose the black
It might turn out wrong that way
Considering the choices we make
Invert, disguise and
Compromise
These choice aren't always
Black and white
They come inside and,
Blur the lines and,
Now I don't know left from right
Today or tonight?
I just want to make it alright
If I choose to leave
I might find yesterday
That the right choice was
To choose to stay and
Everything is turning out gray
Considering the choices we make
Invert, disguise and
Compromise
These choice aren't always
Black and white
They come inside and,
Blur the lines and,
Now I don't know left from right...
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Author's Note: This poem was written within the duration of a very difficult choice I was faced with making. The problem exactly is a bit of long story, so I won't write it all here, but for those who are interested, it now turns out I made the right choice after all. Yay! =) Thanks for reading!
-RLT
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Thanks for the comments--
As to your question, garcon7, yes, I am a songwriter. I manage my bro's band, and play a bit of guitar, drums, and bass, but I can't claim to be proficient in any of those. Thank you for the compliments. =)
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Comment by: garcon7 - 2006-11-20 20:00
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| hey thanks for commenting my stuff.now its my turn lol...Your poem reads a lot like a song. With the repeating paragraph,just like a chorus.It gave very vivid effect to your poem and set the rhythm just right.I thought you used too many ands in your first paragraph...i get rally picky about grammar but i think breaking the rules for the sake of the rhythm can be good,if it works...in this case i think you pull it off....are you a muscian or a songwriter by any chance? |
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Kris, your style of repeating stanzas in your pieces works at times and other times it doesn't. I felt in this one it created a mood of indecisiveness that meshed well with the piece. Good job.
Yvylyn |
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