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isismarie
Rachael Fields
United States, Missouri

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Waiting...

Sometimes, there is nothing left, but the words that are left unspoken.
The things that linger in the air, heavy like a blanket
Covering the naked skin on a chilly winters day.
The emotions that swirl, like the whirlpool
A sinking feeling that rejection is not far behind.
Closing your eyes, taking a breath,
Waiting'¦
The reaction too much to bare, even if its not happened yet.
Words tumble out, ramble, making no sense.
There's a reason they are being said, and yet'¦
For some reason there is dread following close behind.
Sometimes there is nothing left, but to say the words'¦
That usually build until there is nothing left
To do but express
The way you feel.
Waiting'¦

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skypoetone Comment by: skypoetone - 2008-09-09 16:00
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There's a heartbreak in your words,
very tangible, at least to me...
but one can sense the dread
running around it all its nakedness.
As you say, ‘waiting’ to pounce...
very strong, emotive.

I'm touched by this. ~T
kamereon Comment by: kamereon Online- 2007-12-31 12:56
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too true...great fluidity throughout this piece...really enjoyed it...thanks for the great read
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-02-27 08:02
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I love it..you manage to eloquently express all those feelings that come with the "wait."I can feel myself experiencing those same emotions. Great writing.
ravenheart99 Comment by: ravenheart99 - 2007-02-15 19:17
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this is great. these words describe a cerain few instances in my life...
fredav Comment by: fredav - 2006-10-07 23:08
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I loved this..especially the feeling of ambiguity I get. Like, this could be for someone about to get dumped or the one who is gonna do the dumping.. I've been on both sides and trust me, you hit this on the mark.
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