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aribaby
Erin Hune Glover
United States, KY, Lexington

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Escape

The chalk dust in the room
Coats the inside of my nose and throat.
I would much rather be outside,
In the freshly rain-washed air,
Being kissed by a million tiny breezes.

Through the tall, skinny window,
I can see only one tall, skinny tree,
Holding the setting sun in its branches.
I hope the sun does not escape
Before I do. But maybe

My friend the tree, out of pity, will hold tightly
To the mellowing sun until I, no longer
Trapped in a room full of regurgitated
Knowledge, can enjoy it fully.
Probably not. Trees are selfish creatures.

It will most likely watch the sunset
From its great height, alone.

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Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2008-03-25 14:05
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This really brought back the feelings of imprisonment and the inhumane act of keeping young minds trapped on hard wooden seats whilst some failed somebody spews dead men's views at you and threatens you if you dare question - or humiliates you for trying. Indoctrination camps surrounded by nature - just to further torture you...

This a great subject
I adored the line
'Holding the setting sun in its branches'
Beautiful.x
One for my library...x
CharredQuill Comment by: CharredQuill - 2007-04-12 22:51
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I felt rather the same way when I was still in school. Despite the fact that I hated the outdoors, I would have much rather have been sitting outside than in a boring old classroom. (Thankfully we had whiteboards with markers rather than chalk). Though, I do enjoy chalk from time to time.

I particularly connected with the line "Trapped in a room full of regurgitated Knowledge," as essentially thats what it is. They don't seem to teach us anything new. Its the same old things over and over again that we don't really need to know at all.

I think you've captured the feelings of the bored student quite well.

Well done.
thecandystore Comment by: thecandystore - 2007-03-29 17:52
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I too like the images here. Well done Erin.

C
JohnnySodoff Comment by: JohnnySodoff - 2006-11-28 12:38
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I like it. Really nice flow and some pretty images. I like the part about the tree holding the sun in its branches.

Trees are good. Squirrels live in trees.
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