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| I appreciate this piece of work in that you challenge me to think of "remembering" not as a wistful, passive act, but the real embodiment of calling forth emotions from the past that do justice to the people that they represent. Thank you! |
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| Sounds like there's some pain behind these questions. Last line, "im" should be "I'm". I noticed you didn't capitalize "I" anywhere in the poem. That would help a great deal. Keep writing. Free-style gives lots of room for expression. Janet |
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Comment by: roy - 2007-04-27 01:17
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This is a very meaningful poem, the sense is yearning, the character is reaching out. personaly i am definatley the prize holder at EDITRED for the worst grammer/spelling/typo's of uloads, so i read others without hassle, and without comment. I like a good poem, regardless of errors.
Thanks for the read!
Roy |
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| this poem is sorrowful yet meaningful. Other than the minor typoes, it was really great! |
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| I hope this piece helped you work through your emotions and gave you strength. The only suggestion I have is to edit and fix typos such as "sur eyou" -- should be "sure you." Good luck and best wishes, dear. |
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