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Fouchega
Gavin Fouche
South Africa, Cape Town

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Whenever We Make Love

Whenever we make word-filled love late at night
She looks on while we lie infront of the fire
Petulantly all too aware of my passion's plight
For it is secretly she who drives my desire

And when the deed is done in time
Her and I will cease to play at this pretence
And while I feel the familiarities of her spine
We'll leave behind these true romantics we so incense.

And while making referential love to her she'll clearly see
That I possibly couldn't bid either one goodbye
For we are trapped in this marriage of three -
Creativity, my Oxford dictionary, and I

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jkaber Comment by: jkaber - 2006-10-16 15:45
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Very good! You really caught me on this one! I wondered what you were doing in front of the fire with two women! Only one little nit:
We'll leave behind these true romantics we so incense.

Who are the "true romantics" you refer to???

Clever poem!
Comment by: - 2006-10-14 04:33
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Ha got me.
I believed it to be a haughtingly beutful love poem.
A wonderful peice of work here Gavin. I enjoyed the read.
Comment by: - 2006-10-10 19:36
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I agree that this is very romantic. When I read this last line I laughed at your trick. It is very good, Gavin. Thank you for this poem and smile.

Enrique
Comment by: - 2006-10-10 16:34
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I thought it was so romantic till the punchline then I found it priceless!...GREAT JOB! -Leah
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2006-10-10 14:29
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lol I love the last line, Gavin! Ha! I don't think I've ever seen "Oxford Dictionary" in a poem before. Great inclusion. A few corrections:

in front (two words)

She and I will cease

pretense

Great poem and as Louis says, great metaphor. Glad to see something new from you, too! T. xox
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