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eli tender
Giles Paley-Phillips
United Kingdom

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a little peace of mind

A fan beats its wings
while the sun beams a smile,
the ring of a bell
atones in the silence.
pick up a pen,
scribble down a namesake.
Look, see, and find a place
for this changing whatever.

A picture on a wall
with a woman bathed in cotton,
behind her a sky
made to raise the dead.
We bow down our heads
to figure out god's problems,
leave our shoes outside the door
it's for him to choose!

Reminisce a book
you never liked,
until you'd finished.
My underachievement eyes
can barely read the lines,
a journey far to long
for a mind resigned
for laughing.


My heart is another version
of frostbites winter excursion,
greenish coloured questions
waiting in the breeze.
When you feel the need
to start treading water,
wait for the right rain cloud
that spells out your name.



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Giles Paley-Phillips, 2005

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hannah01zack Comment by: hannah01zack - 2008-08-10 09:07
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its so different and thats awesome. i loved this poem with every line i had no idea of what to expect you lead me in and you made it sound beautiful with word. grreat job.
Honor Comment by: Honor - 2008-07-16 07:23
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This is great, nice rythm. "a sky made to raise the dead" I like that idea, that and "My underachievement eyes."
MikeMack Comment by: MikeMack - 2008-05-20 17:45
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The poem was thought provoking and even smacked of Eliot's poem Prufrock, however in much shorter terms. Mucho Kudos.
aprilmayed Comment by: aprilmayed Online- 2008-03-24 14:24
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I really enjoyed your ending to this poem. You have a very subtle way of writing. It's appealing.

I would love to read more of your work...
Sajani Comment by: Sajani - 2008-03-14 14:10
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Nice work, Eli. I agree with Matthew: the last verse is great!
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