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orange breath rebellion
Last night I read all the horror books
You so kindly left by the side of our bed.
Titles like, living forever and raising a child,
scare me as much as never losing.
I go to sleep dreaming of being broke,
no food to feed the young,
no clothes to keep them warm,
no chance of living long.
Tossing and turning, I awake to find I'm dead,
was I noble and courageous? Or did I take the easy way out?
Of all my restraints you are my favourite,
but Thirst is my only agenda.
Boys got a lot to learn about nature,
Boys got a lot to be scared of,
It's not about being a man; it's about being human
and we all have a weakness
I want to go back, make it all right again.
Work a lot or a little more.
Not pretending to be a perfect father,
But I am close to the start.
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| Alcoholism. Nicely put. |
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| Even though I've been writing poetry for quite some time now, I've only recently truly began to read it. I go about it by trying to find the story in it and I find it grand to be able to question the author. So is the about a young man whose significant other (girlfriend maybe fiancee)is ready and willing to assume the role as wife [hence the book entitled living forever (women of course live longer than their counterparts)] and mother but the young man is afraid because boys will be boys? The young man (mentally and emotionally very boyish) withdraws, becomes numb and is "dead" perhaps emotionally (the stereotypical man). The man realizes his humaness, his mistake in wanting to avoid responsibility and adulthood (maybe the woman sensed his withdrawal and began cut him off, if you know what I mean, and his "thirst" brought him to his senses). He "returns" to her no longer as boy but a grown man, willing to at least try, willing to perhaps fall. I read it about 10 times, lol, and I'm probably way off. Very enjoyable read. I'll have to bookmark this one. |
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| It never gets easier...thanks for this wonderful glimpse into parenting. |
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I wanted to giggle after reading the first part. Further reading and I realized that you had captured me...pulled at my heart strings and loosened them a bit.
good job I look forward to reading more
jen* |
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| perfect beginning line to capture my attention. Pulled me in and made me want to know what the piece was about. Now that i've had a opportunity to read it. i'm glad i did. |
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