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poety55
Caroline Bennett
United States

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My Favorite Surprise

What would you do
If I kissed you tonight?
Would you return the favor
Or pull back in fright?

That's all I can wonder
As I reach for you now.
My heart's beating faster,
But I've caught you somehow.

I still can't believe it;
It's too good to be true.
Who would have thought
This would happen with you?

We've talked now for hours,
So much, I can't think.
And now I can feel you
Drifting to sleep.

So now I'll say farewell to you,
And leave you for tonight.
Just know that however
Scared we might be,
You're still
My Favorite Surprise.

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VB 16 Comment by: VB 16 - 2006-10-16 07:00
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Touching- I could feel myself become part of the flow. Well done!
Jamilah Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-10-14 20:53
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This is sweet. The depth of friendship, teetering on the brink of something more.
scotspoetryman Comment by: scotspoetryman - 2006-10-13 07:01
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I liked it, yes sweetness, innocence and all throughout. For me I wondered why you crossed over from rhyme in the first 3 stanzas to free flow in the final two...would it have been better with rhyme all way through? who knows!?
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2006-10-13 06:47
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*sigh* Lovely.. very lovely. My favorite too I think.;)
InHizImage Comment by: InHizImage - 2006-10-13 06:34
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I agree with Teri, the innocence in this is refreshing. I love the title and how you used it in the final stanza. (Or vice versa- it works)
Good write ~ Yvy
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