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Inferno
Fernando Sillas
United States

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Most never get this

Dazzling waves of nothing surround everything as if I had something to say.

There is something worth telling you. Something worth crying for.               

Ill never ever be there for you, as the blood flows down the stairs Was there ever a man like me or a women like you before?        Did we make love before we were born?         Will we after we die?      Is this paper in your hand or are holding my soul? Keep it better than you've kept yours.

These words are older than you know. They were made in a tiny room without you in it.

 They were made like diamonds are made'¦.with time'¦ and pressure

Will we make love someday? Have we already? Or did you stay in front of the stairs staring?

I was in the room waiting..for someone to stop my bleeding heart. This is the moment I remember most. You afraid'¦..me bleeding'¦'¦ It's the last thing I remember before I was born but did we make love?


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Juan2 Comment by: Juan2 - 2007-02-15 21:11
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Bizarre, but in a good way. It isn't wholly coherent, and there isn't necessarily a plot to follow, but the words are still intriguing. The story gives off a sense of confusion, or incoherence, questions that need answering. We've all been in that place before, if not in this same situation, and it is portrayed well here.

"They were made like diamonds are madeâ?¦.with timeâ?¦ and pressure." - I liked this line a lot. Good image.



Happy Writings.
fredav Comment by: fredav - 2006-08-15 06:55
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this was totally awesome. everything connected with me... thank you for such a great read. bookshelving this.
Comment by: - 2006-05-06 16:30
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Wow. great use of language here. Very beautiful and makes me think. Thanks! :)

"I was in your room..." and everything after that is my favorite part. so full of meaning! Great job
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-05-04 21:19
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This is cool man. Great style of writing. love your repetitive question on making love and your opening line is awesome!
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-05-04 14:37
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Beautiful writing. Very moving and heartfelt. This is going straight to my bookshelf. Love the repetition. So many good lines, it's impossible to single out favourites.
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