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VB 16
Vinay Benjamin
Bahrain, Manama, Manama

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Comments: 7

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Beginnings And Endings

Zygote of discontent adamantly clings,
Yelling brazen laments,
Xenophobic clamouring sounds,
Wicked, discordant, unpleasant.
Vile vendetta unleashed upon,
Umbilicus of happiness,
Till late intact and now,
Squalidly stripped, lacking purpose!

Resurfacing in manipulative moves,
Quaint actions malevolent,
Provoked intent driven by,
Obnoxious obsession.
Needing a forced deliberate effort,
Masquerading just to be,
Lethargy meanwhile avidly tethers,
Kinky frustrations humourlessly!

Joviality once known invigorates,
Inaction to sportive challenge,
Hoisting enthusiasm that is albeit,
Grimly vexed by indolence.
Foiled too by nervous desperation,
Escalating disillusioned,
Deliberation too having reached nadir,
Concedes to the incongruence-

Beginnings or endings- eventualities,
Amortized by stoic fate!

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Falling Comment by: Falling - 2007-11-10 11:34
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Your wording was unusual and complex, mixed like a klodoscope. I had to think about what the wording meant, and what content you were using them. Reading your comments above, I understand more about your poem and why you have the wording the way it is. It's clever, but it doesn't mesh for me. I feel that you wrote this to make a statement, and possibly enter a contest, forced writing.
jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2006-10-22 04:28
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yeah i noticed straight away
you like doing this sort of thing dont you
well its very clever
and lots of kinky words as well
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2006-10-19 07:05
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Yes, I did notice, and that is why I think that you are very clever.
VB 16 Comment by: VB 16 - 2006-10-19 05:23
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Valerie, thank you again. I do love to "chew on" a thought before I put it down in writing. As I pointed out to Manson, did you notice I used the reversed alphabet in these lines?
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2006-10-19 05:12
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Another well written puzzler, and again, very, very clever! I actually have to read this a couple of times to appreciate its full meaning. Again, you are a clever one. Nice work.
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