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Comment by: mitra - 2006-10-18 22:07
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Love the word play in this. How you have reused the words of the first stanza in the opposite direction kinda like the swirl spiral of incense.
Clever form. :) |
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Comment by: VB 16 - 2006-10-18 03:09
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| Jamilah thanks for your kind words. |
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Comment by: VB 16 - 2006-10-18 03:07
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| Hi Maggie, You're spot on! I had finished my meditation and these lines had floated in in that silence. Thank you for your opinion. |
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| WOW...I love the calm feeling I get from this one.Were you ispired to write this one while meditating?It feels like it.Great work...reminds me of RUMI. |
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Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-10-17 07:32
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You use an interesting style. I enjoy your imagery. I'm allergic to perfume, but I could nearly smell it--and certainly visualize it.
My favorite part of this poem is "Stillness reigning supreme in meditation/Time in suspended animation." Very nice.
And welcome to Si. I'm sure you'll like it here. |
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