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VB 16
Vinay Benjamin
Bahrain, Manama, Manama

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On Such Nights

On nights when the moon absconds,
To some strange recess,
Darkened heavens, overhead appear,
Pierced with teeming holes.
Pinpoints of light filter through,
Darkness finely sieved,
A brief shufti to marvel at,
Higher planes, tongue in cheek.
Clustered locales of blinking lights,
With brighter spots interlaced,
Halls, manors, residences of,
Distant tenants, a discrete race.

While in this penitentiary of silence,
Where even whispers do not exist,
Observation seems finely honed,
Sharpened by a sense deceased.
Culpable sight at this gain overcomes,
Prejudice of distracting sound,
That otherwise it'd proverbially followed,
Camel like through the needle's eye.

On such nights mind's eye is,
On that road to Damascus again,
Where blinded by blazing dilemmas,
Gropes mysteries it can't comprehend.

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mattlubin Comment by: mattlubin - 2007-02-27 23:12
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Wonderful choice of words. Like this line: Sharpened by a sense deceased.
It flows so well.
And I really like how the "moon absconds"... great image.
VB 16 Comment by: VB 16 - 2006-12-22 00:41
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Myst-
You have an amazing understanding - I've try hard to get my message across and what you say about the vocab is probably right. Thanks for appreciating.

LOL
Vinay
Mystie Comment by: Mystie - 2006-12-21 15:34
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...wow. ::blinking in a state of dazed awe:: This is amazing! butt no wonder no ones commented they probably don't understand all of the vocabulary! lol! good job, and may God bless you in your writing and you life!!!
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