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On stark and rainy nights
In the glow of the waking moon
The twinkles in the misty puddles
Make waves in the opposite noon
The lunar face shines bright
Through prisms of teardrop clouds
Each drop beholds miniscule shuttle
For rainbows in Midnight's shroud
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Thanks. I actually feel the same way about the poem. I know what I want to say in the second stanza (and I said it) but I had trouble shaping it. Be assured I'll work on it.
Nice and simple; I especially like the title. I think the first stanza works a lot better, though, and the second part just feels very awkward and forced. I liked the idea that you were putting into it, but I think that it needs a better rhythm.
