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jakrebs
James Krebs
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Wish you were Here, Wish us Luck

I was the one who had to tell my wife
her best friend who had been missing
for days had indeed killed herself.

She cried and cried and I didn't know what
to tell her to make it any better.
I'm no good at that stuff.

Her friend was tortured for a long time
before she shot herself sitting cross-legged
and peaceful at her favorite, scenic overlook.

I couldn't help a small inward smile
when I heard this and I admit I thought
how this dignified death was so Gina-like.

One of the things my wife said in her grief
was, 'Gina was going to help me teach
Jonah how to be a good person.'

And the sad truth of the matter is
Gina would have been great in that
department, none better, hands down.

So as far as Jonah goes without your help
the best plan we could come up with
is to just muddle along through, so wish us luck.

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ravenshadowwinds Comment by: ravenshadowwinds - 2007-10-22 17:50
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This was honest and borne of pain, I liked how straight forward and clean it is. the style is absolutely perfect for the content. I'm sorry for the event that caused the poem.
danielunknown Comment by: danielunknown - 2007-04-15 16:21
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As sharp as a double-edged sword. There's death and then there's suicide; they both fucking suck but the latter is indescribable - or so i thought. An agonizingly appropriate write on a horrific incident.
Kerosene Comment by: Kerosene - 2007-03-28 10:25
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Gosh, this is heart-wrenching. Painful read.

Thanks for sharing. :(

john
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-03-06 13:29
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That first stanza really just shocks you.
I think because it is so honest and forthright.

I think that this experience is a unique one, and you have to actually go through it to know what it feels like.

A good simple expression of emotions**
waxseal Comment by: waxseal - 2006-11-08 11:49
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Sorry for the loss - best wishes for all. And a very touching poem, nice rythym, heartfelt and awkward - very well done :-)
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