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Juan2
John Lander
United States, California

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Cordillera in the Palm of My Hand

A knuckled ridge
a callus torn in dry tufts
of old, cracked skin
trying to heal.

The veins of this valley
are shriveled and exposed,
only brittle spines of chaparral
cling to the salted surface
or crumble down to join the dust.

But peeked over a shouldered horizon
the white-faced moon
is a pock-eyed smile
as I capture a lone falcon's
wings afloat like specks in the great whorled
ridges at the tips of my splayed fore-fingers.

I close my eyes and
the rhythm of atoms
drum down the spine
of these dried out mountain
bones elbowing the fat
skies like a rangy burro
collapsed upon a wintered oak.

We wait for new seeds to fall, replenish
this earth in a changing of seasons, yet
bare soles can taste the ancient dirt
ripe with knowledge
that loosened grips
can still find a pulse
alive and soaring beneath mechanical roars
of jumbo-jets, just hiccups in the paling breadth.

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frankman Comment by: frankman - 2008-01-21 08:28
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I dont get a smooth sail over some of the stanzas but...I think you know what you are trying to say. YOu have a geographer's eye.
TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2007-03-14 06:05
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reminds me a little of Ginsberg's "Sunflower". This may sound a bit weird but i've noticed in your poetry that you write metaphor into the human body really well, your imagery involving skin in several instances works greatly.

The lines of the stanzas increase in each verse wihich is obviously intentional but the line lengths vary a lot which throws me while i read it a little.

"That a loosened grip
Can still find the pulse of this place" - fantastic line. love it.
solaris Comment by: solaris - 2007-03-08 05:22
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i would very much like to feature some of your writings over at PhaZe2 just as soon as we get back into the swing of things. moving and puppies have meant a stale-mate for now, but soon we will be freed-up to showcase more writers of your calibre. exceptional work.

mail me if you are interested, and i will send you links to check out, including my MySpace.
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-12-28 18:22
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I am an honest person (sometimes to my own peril) and I did not really get the poem in the beginning. It was that last stanza that opened up my eyes.

You wrote this in a way that each piece compliments the next.
I love a poem that challenges me to think "outside the box"

Thanks for the read.**
marinesdaughter Comment by: marinesdaughter - 2006-12-04 15:50
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I like the way you wrote this, the words you used, it's unique!
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