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3 Years old and not a moment too soon
She clicked her mouth quietly
A dark shiny smile
Underneath darkened pools of sight
'What do you got in your mouth my dear?'
A tiny head of curls to scatter the light
That shone above her head only
Ahh she stands out in a crowd and she
Only wants to melt away altogether.
'What do you got in your mouth my dear?'
A mouth so tiny it couldn't possibly hold anything
But a smile and tongue to taste ice cream lovingly
Oh she is a little thing already full of nightmares
Of the one shiny thing in her mouth.
Shyly a pink tongue finds it way past her teeth
Perfect skin and pink lips that should be
Kissing teddy bears and mommy's cheek
But now only hide that thing in her mouth
A spike and a ball pierced through her tiny tongue.
This one needs a lot of work yet. It was something I had seen while at work one day, and it affected me so much that I had to express it somehow.
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Isn't this illegal? To have child's tongue pierced? This is terrible (not your poem, but the subject). No wonder this bothered you!
I'd spell out "Three" in the first line. Other than that, I'd change nothing and then find a place to get this published. It needs to be read by a lot of people. *shudders*
i have to say when i first read 3 years old i thought it was referring to the piercing, which i think was the intention. you've worked it well to make the piercing seem somehow obscene. it is hard to fathom a 3 year old with a tongue piercing.
