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Cursory
Cursory
United Kingdom

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3 Words

I'm going crazy,
Just going insane,
I want a drug,
To ease this pain.

Words that hurt,
Pain that's sears,
Staring, wishing,
Holding back tears.

What you did,
From the start,
Was love me,
And take my heart.

But then it changed,
You let them talk,
You thought about it,
And we came to a halt.

So it's them I blame,
Them, not you,
I have 3 words,
I miss you.

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Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2007-01-16 13:06
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The 1st verse is straight in there, and very powerful. The simplicity of this poem is its strength. But I found the 4th verse let it down a bit, especially 'You thought about it,
And we came to a halt.' â?? this is quite weak compared with the rest. I wonder if you could do something along the lines of, 'You heard them talk
And I saw you turn
And watched you walk.'
I really like the rest, especially the 1st and final verses.
Pain thatâ??s sears, [lose the apostrophe s]
lofty Comment by: lofty - 2006-11-21 13:07
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good rhythm...
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