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Comment by: Mick - 2008-01-29 03:17
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Another Excellent write John!
Suggestion – “Lidless eyes” already gives the image of not being able to blink, so,
"Don't blink" I feel doesn't need to be there. :) |
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Comment by: Dante - 2008-01-27 18:03
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| Hot damn! You couldn't have said it any better. I love the darkness of this piece. I love that the writer appears to be just as twisted in their point of view. Adds an introspective quality to the piece. Great, great write, D. |
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| Woah, I don't even know what to say to this. Your words and imagery are so amazing, and I love how much the title contributes to the poem. nice job. |
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| Woah, I don't even know what to say to this. Your words and imagery are so amazing, and I love how much the title contributes to the poem. nice job. |
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| i really enjoyed this poem, felt like i was there in a seedy bar watching the regulars tap away at their foamy life. aint it great when the seedy is kinda of alluring to the reader?! |
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