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kyrasdaddy
Robert Cano
United States, TX, San Antonio

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A Sense Of Completion

Feeling like you're so far away
Longing for you to be where you belong,
Here in my arms, laying your head on my chest
For you give to me a sense of completion,
A sense of rest and hope and dreams'¦

You have filled my heart with want
With desire and passion once more
And I've since stopped wondering how
You could've broken through my wall
Your smile, your eyes I don't want to live without

Once more I find myself daring to dream
Daring to unlock all those things of past
That I have kept hidden for so long,
Fearful of hopes only being destroyed
Even with my walls up, you still found your way in

I still have fears, my dear'¦
Tears that have fallen to no comfort
Still resound within my soul, longing to be released
And each fear, well founded, still exists
But my heart wants to let go, no more running

Except to the warmth of your arms'¦

The cold of my body has since disappeared
My soul's contempt taken from me
And every thought held is of you alone-
The dream of what could be, of the hoped for future,
But not without the realities of what is

Yes, I find myself wanting you
Perhaps, even, a sense of need for you
A longing desire to be everything you could want
Or need for the future you've always dreamed of
I pray you may need me too

Smile for me, my dear, smile for me,
For it's your smile that takes my breath
Your eyes that I get lost in,
And in your arms that I find myself melting within'
You have given to me a sense of completion

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Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-03-06 06:55
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great poem. Nice rythm to this poem . well done
Deborah Anne Comment by: Deborah Anne - 2007-01-15 22:46
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Absolutely beautiful words....it reads so smoothly and touches the heart....Deborah
sharmaine Comment by: sharmaine - 2006-12-18 12:35
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Nice! very nice! i love the flow of it and when u get to the bottom, u can actually feel the completion. it's awesome! love it! *MuAh!*
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2006-11-16 21:24
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Wonderfully written, nothing more to say, Robert! Touching as always!
InHizImage Comment by: InHizImage - 2006-10-30 13:28
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"The dream of what could be, of the hoped for future" ~ hoped-for would read easier (JMO)

In the last stanza, I'd use ";"s - "For it's your smile that takes my breath; your eyes that I get lost in; and in your arms that I find myself melting within--"

This is beautiful, Robert. I agree with Bonnie, to see you writing again, and in such a way, it's refreshing and inspiring. *winks*

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