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Sunflowers (after William Blake)
A young woman boards the metro
& takes the seat beside me.
She is tall, fair, pretty, smells
of cigarettes & Sunflowers,
the perfume that you used to
wear when we first met, the scent
which used to catch the breath
in my throat & set off a
warm tumbling
inside of me.
It was your everyday perfume
you told me. You'd picked it up
cheap in Boots.
you wore more expensive scents
on nights out or on special
occasions -- something with a touch
of class.
But it's the Sunflowers I remember.
I turn my face to the window
as the bus moves slowly through town.
Out in the street the wind blows,
the skirts of women flap like flags
in the breeze. Builders huddle in
the half-built shell of an
office block, their palms cupped
protectively around cigarettes, taking
a break from making this town whole again.
I close my eyes & breath deeply the scent
of Sunflowers as I wait for
this traveller's journey to be done.
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What a lovely quiet piece. The nostalgia associated with scents is vivid and immediate. A chance passenger on a bus, and off you go to another place and time. Other things bring back memories, but scents do it with such force.
I’m not a poet so don’t understand the reference to Blake, but do understand this poem in its literal and nuanced sense. Loved the description of the builders and thier cupped hands, too. I enjoyed it all tremendously. Thanks! |
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Comment by: Teri - 2007-09-11 13:52
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traveller's
Sorry. Nitpicky me coming out.
This is so delicate and rather heartbreaking, Jim. I was asked what sense is not used enough in writing, and while I wanted to say 'common', I decided on 'smell'. I can see a picture of a loved one lost, read a card he gave me a long time ago, see roses of the shade he bought me, and that's all sad but it's okay. But one slight whiff of the cologne he used, and I feel like I've been punched in the tummy. You express that feeling well - the scent and the memories it brings back. The journey that one perfume places you on. It's beautiful, and on a rainy day like this, just what I needed to read. Thanks for sharing it, Jim.
Teri xo |
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| For some reason I just had to put on a bit of my own everyday scent after reading this. Vanilla in my case. I thought you might find that reaction amusing. |
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This is a lovely poem, I enjoyed reading it a lot. But mentioning the metro on the first line than on the fourth stanza writing "as the bus moves" isn't it a conflict?
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Comment by: GrkGrl - 2007-04-02 21:32
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i had to laugh because i too separate my perfumes from everyday to special occasions...
you have this ease in creating such significance in subtle moments...i enjoy that about you a great deal.....gg |
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