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Tillyboa
Frances Roberson
United Kingdom, London

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Wakening

Mumblings to and fro
in a pattern pressed to life's mundanities,
routine as train track click clack,
fixed and timed,
no rhyme to
boulster waves of
stacked
up
questions
wondering
when you stop with time to ponder
how has life got here
how did the jig-saw puzzle of moments
redraw the picture
now coloured as if by another's hand
you can only ask 'is this what I have become?'

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seeds Comment by: seeds - 2007-04-23 12:29
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unorthodox work
coreyhopps Comment by: coreyhopps - 2007-02-25 07:09
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Wonderfully abrupt, and thought provoking.
sudipal Comment by: sudipal - 2007-02-21 09:12
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very pretty and thought provoking. i think everyone comes across those feelings at least one point in his life.
Travisty Comment by: Travisty - 2007-02-14 18:11
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Wow. I really really like this. I am totally going to add this to my bookshelf.
"now coloured as if by another's hand
you can only ask 'is this what I have become?'"
I love those lines. Simply amazing.
tinaleigh120 Comment by: tinaleigh120 - 2006-12-31 21:18
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i loved this. when something gives you a feeling that races through your body then you know they've got it and you've got it. It was simple and yet deep. Great job!
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