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Daniel Car Crash
Daniel Smallegange
Canada, Toronto

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my untouchable one

my untouchable one
whose fingers clutch
my elbow in dreams
whose breath catches
lip bite sighs
from across the sea
whose chameleon eyes
change with the passing
of the sun
my untouchable one
it is you the thief
stealing thoughts
creeping serenely
into a clenched soul
releasing with
siren songs as
birds of prey
swirl behind my peaceful
eyes
my untouchable one
there is a place and need
for you.

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DrumAnQuill Comment by: DrumAnQuill - 2007-07-12 13:00
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Yes, it can be so...how dreadful though
carriedale Comment by: carriedale - 2007-06-05 10:14
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I have to agree: VERY romantic.
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-05-26 01:04
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Little images here and there are really beautiful. Very nice flow. Love the way it invokes feeling without every really needing to be spelled out.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2007-02-07 11:21
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Very lovely. Evokes a sense of tenderness, but the style you use stops it from getting overly sentimental or Hallmarky.
GrkGrl Comment by: GrkGrl - 2006-12-26 20:32
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heh @ johnny...

this is beautiful...and yes, i admit it, i'd have sex with you if you used it on me.....gg
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