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Cursory
Cursory
United Kingdom

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Fool

Your twisted lies,
Im such a fool
I let you break me,
Entranced by your diguise
Subtle and gentle,
The person I thought I knew.
But deep beyond
Your loving face,
Was an evil smirk,
As I was dragged deeper
Into your world.
As soon as I was settled,
That was your time,
Your time to turn,
Into the idiot I know now.
But I didn't scar,
Everyone else saw you,
But I was blind.
I hate you.
Except that.
End of your reign..
Over.

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tressahobbs Comment by: tressahobbs - 2007-04-15 20:25
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Wow. I was definitely sucked into the emotion of this poem.
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2007-01-16 12:57
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I love the ending; the way the lines get shorter is very strong and emphasises the strength of the speaker. What does 'But I didn't scar' mean? Is it a reference to the ending, when she's left him/her?
Should it say 'Accept that' rather than 'Except that'?
'evil smirk' jumped out at me â?? I wondered whether something more understated would carry more weight.
Also, is it deliberate that 'lies' and 'disguise' rhyme, but nothing else does?
Amber Lauren Comment by: Amber Lauren - 2006-12-28 19:31
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Raw.
should diguise be disguise?
lofty Comment by: lofty - 2006-11-21 13:06
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almost read like a story...sucked me in. excellent.
GrkGrl Comment by: GrkGrl - 2006-11-05 11:21
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Hmm...could it be? Could we have possibly dated the same guy??
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