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joshcupp
Josh Cupp
United States, florida, winter park

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You Remember

T onight as I wait for you to come home
O ffering to listen to you on the phone

M emories of our early days came to my mind
Y ou remember our first date, it was around lunch time

L ol, omg, wasnt it funny
A cold pasta dish, that was nasty and runny
D elightfully bad I made it myself
Y ou remember the first day we met

L ocked in my car, the handle broke, wasnt I upset
O ver the years I have grown to never forget
V ery special times of us , of things I will never regret
Each and every day we grow, we get stronger and better yet

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Comment by: - 2006-11-07 03:17
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Excellent, Josh. I wouldn't have suspected this was an acrostic, had Writinghome33 not pointed it out. The words/lines seem to blend into one another seamlessly, and I love the "lol, omg" (so modern).
Writinghome33 Comment by: Writinghome33 - 2006-11-07 00:56
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I like it. it conveys real life experience with a cool little acronym thing down the side lol. Thanks for the critiquing on mine ill work on it here id say the flow is a little off but very fixable.
joshcupp Comment by: joshcupp - 2006-11-06 20:36
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this one is dedicated to my wife. Who I truly love.
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