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meatloaf
meat loaf
Philippines, cavite, cavite

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Nov.8

Nov. 8


It was hanging by the wall,
and i can't help it but to stall.
For out of the corner of my eye,
I was accidentally fixed
on a day on the calendar.


A day of no ocassion,
to dance for a celebration.
Printed as blue, to give us a clue,
that's its not of any special.
Unlike the numbers printed in red--
of holidays treated so regal.


But I dare not to look,
on its left space which another day took.
Because of its similar blue print,
it did not gave them a hint,
that i despise that it was mine,
Two years and counting!
a day I consider reversely divine.


Snapped out from a memory of the past,
it could not be jumbled and is meant to last.
My gaze still shoted-- even transfixed,
to a number, to a day, this current time is fixed.
And on its side is a day I dare not to speak,
of whatever reason I'm not ready to leak.
My eyes still darted on the day of today,
which I playfully call:
The day after 'the day.'


And so let me deafen you with a shout,
"That day is not for me to write a poem about!!!!"
It had slipped into yesterday, and so let me move on...
For I'll rather write about today,
were my eyes are accidentally fixed on.

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Beck Comment by: Beck - 2006-11-09 08:16
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I love the ending. It's a good poem, don't worry about the typos so much anyone can learn to write without error, not everyone can write with elegance.. you don't have a problem with the latter of the two.
KeepBreathing Comment by: KeepBreathing - 2006-11-09 06:27
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this is a very good piece...you are already a great writer, just keep it up and evolve.
lukewest Comment by: lukewest - 2006-11-09 02:47
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Hi Meatloaf. First of all, thankyou for reading some of my work. Most of my work is full of typos to, so don't get to worked up about it. I read your profile, you mentioned that you wanted to be a great writer. I honestly believe you are already one. "A brother like you" is the poem you read on my site. It's based on a true story, to answer your question. Good work, keep it up. :)
meatloaf Comment by: meatloaf - 2006-11-08 20:17
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where are the typos could you please point it out?
Comment by: - 2006-11-08 11:14
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This has the makings of a great poem, meat loaf. There are a few typos, but they're easy to change.
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