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joshcupp
Josh Cupp
United States, florida, winter park

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My Suprise

Mommy I have a suprise for you
But I need to know if one thing is true
Do you love my daddy, please tell me if you do
Did you know that he raped you, or do you not have a clue

I felt the push, I felt the touch, I just want to know why
He put drugs in your drink,beat you up, to where it made you cry
He said he loves you, he said he cares, is that all a lie
He pushed, you bled, he forced you in bed, he looked like he wanted you to die

Now back to my suprise, you see
Are you ready for a baby
It's fine if you dont want me
If that will make you happy.

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Comment by: - 2007-12-10 19:23
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Too many cliches, too many shifts in rhythm. Forced drama. Nothing revelatory.
Comment by: - 2006-11-09 10:11
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Excellent, Josh. Written from the perspective of an unborn baby... the 'did you know that he raped you' line is simply inspired. Out of the mouths of babes...
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