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Poem I wrote in ballpoint pen on my hand at a party last night
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Poem I wrote in ballpoint pen on my hand at a party last night
Thumping beat
invites me
but I lack
the vocabulary of motion
to partake
but
more than that
I lack the courage
to move
I cling to the railing
like a drowning sailor
clings to jetsam -
if I let go
I may sink
into the depths
of bass
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You articulated your feelings well (on your hand). This is a good write and an enjoyable read for those who don't like to put themselves out there and make a fool of themselves (no matter how many others are)
Good write
Yvylyn
heh, the comment about me having a big hand - actually the poem is in two parts because the first part i wrote on my left palm, the second part on my right palm... i was happy that my penmanship turned out decent on both.
I lack the courage to move... that must have been some party, Tev! I really like this poem, as I can relate to it (not being a party animal)... and I love the title.
you must have a big hand. i like the punchiness of this -- it explodes in your mouth like those sweets that crackle on the back of your tongue. perfectly captures that party dynamic for a lot of us.
