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Jars Of Clay
A mound of earth sits on the potters wheel
A vision awaits in the potters heart
To spin and mold and carve into life
To Wet with living waters.
As He spins and spins the sin and its habit out of it
First the mound becomes doughy
Then malleable, spinning and refining
Relearning how to stand in a new form
Mounds shape into curves as darkness
Slips through the potters hand and
Out
Of the old being made new.
Spinning and spinning
Reeling and reeling is the heart of man
When at the mercy of God's molding and pruning
At what greatness rests all around in the centre of his hands
Molding us into jars of clay
See how God carefully carves beautiful patterns on the jars
As he prunes us, shaves off the clay
On the line and around the rim
Following a pattern of the vision in his heart
Things so painful while we are still malleable
Wet to the potters hand, flexible to his touch
The things that will make us beautiful
With a turn on the wheel the process is ever in motion
Repentance and renewal
Marking a groove on the jar of God's handiwork
As he shaves off old habits, curling to the floor
Forming something other,
that will be preserved in the fire of trials
Leaving a pattern of his attributes
Gentle to the touch, textured with His depth and substance
Beautiful to behold, striking reverence all around
Yet we must stay, in the centre of His hands,
Malleable to his will, like wet clay in the potters hands
Turning always this way and that, right or to the left
Strongest, never frail when in his hands,
In the heart of the potters vision
Trusting his hands to bring us to new life.
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Comment by: Lindy - 2007-07-18 20:37
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I have read all your poems and still digesting them, lots of wonderful images to read here...trying to pinpoint the flow and the direction of your voice on the two longest poems, which seems to be consistant in your style of writing...some food for thought...
Have you considered writing Epic Poems? The reason I ask is because your poems read like a narrative story form, and one form of poetry is the Epic format. Something to consider. Here's one website I found which was thought provoking...
http://www.ehow.com/how_3334_write-epic-poem.html
Another valued trait in my fellow writer friend (which I miss) was her ability to give meaningful crits and then she'd nug us with compassion and a gentle hand into the direction she saw our voice and style of writing flowing. Consider the suggestion. You have lots to say here.
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I love how gentle and original this is. It's beautiful. My favourite line follows:
Forming something other,
that will be preserved in the fire of trials
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Comment by: tcbswan Online- 2007-01-23 01:39
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| a beautiful poem and filled with such comforting words--that there is meaning, after all in everything, and nothing is without purpose. thanks for the read! |
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I like the constant rotating motion this poems seems to bring about. I felt as if I was watching a barber's swirly sign spin and spin, around and around. Well done.
I kinda stumbled as I read this part:
"Forming something other,
that will be preserved in the fire of trials" - I think it's phrasing, Maybe add "Than" - "Forming something other than that will..."
I tend to think as the jar is molded and as we grow with God, the jar gets fatter and tougher, more solid. And when the jar is ready for the kiln, it'll be unbreakable.
Thanks for the read and reminder,
john |
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| I like your subtle use of alliteration. "As He spins and spins the sin". I like the double meaning of the title and how you use such vivid imagery. This is one of my favorite lines, "Things so painful while we are still malleable." So true. |
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