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henrydavidlau
Henry David Lau
United Kingdom, Manchester

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Bus Route 365

I turn my ipod up loud.
Two teenage girls effortlessly manoeuvre
Their prams on board, the boy swaggers behind.

A man gets on with a bag of fish and chips,
The smell, slowly filters towards the back
Of the bus. On the opposite side

By the window, a man sneezes without
Covering his mouth, I see the spray
But the woman in front, feels it.

Tracksuits, ponytails and prams accumulate,
They all bundle off at Stretford mall for
McDonalds and Benefits. Suddenly,

A fresh citrus scent fills the air. An old
Woman is peeling an orange, she looks
Like a small child with a complex new toy.

At Hulme, a shadow of a monstrous ribcage
Swallows us whole and then spits us out, as
We drive past the empty carparks.

I turn my ipod off, put it in my bag.
The engine behind me wheezes and splutters,
The seat pattern is made up of green, grey,

Orange and yellow, most of them are stained.
A plastic bottle dislodged from a handrail
Clatters to the ground and it rolls at every

Corner. My elbow is jabbed by
An empty Special Brew can wedged into
A gap beside me. I close my eyes'¦..

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Stefan Comment by: Stefan - 2008-03-31 17:36
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We need more old ladies with oranges in our world.
stobin Comment by: stobin - 2007-06-23 03:04
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Your writing made it so easy to visualise everything that was happening on the bus. I could see that sneeze too and smell the chips. Beautifully written, well done.
Bloomingmaddness Comment by: Bloomingmaddness - 2007-01-30 23:19
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I love this poem...I can SEE everything you are discribing in full detail...I am usually bored with discriptive poems of the writers one moment captured on paper. However, this is brillent. I was on that bus and I saw the sneeze and saw your elbow being jabbed...great job!
JohnnySodoff Comment by: JohnnySodoff - 2006-11-15 12:55
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Congratulations on being the first poem I've seen featuring an ipod.

And I love this friggin' poem, dude. The language is beautiful and paints a picture of a bus I think I've been on more than once. As much as I hate having to ride the bus, I love some of the interesting people watching you can do on their.
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