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The severing of ties spur last minute comebacks
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I lie in the street lacking everything you need. Cars pass by and im taken by defeat. Run me over I beg. Do your worst please. Take my heart with you let my veins run dry let my face turn blue. Laugh at me with another on your arm'¦.
Your life my perfect poetry I wish was never written in the sky by the stars but that's just too bad for me. O lifes simple tragedy your knife my back.
im dying slowly but I cant keep track of the number of breaths taken when I swear theres nothing left '¦ youre gone'¦ the best choice I didn't make you walking out on me. All that's left is dying slowly
so now it's the ties severed and the walking complications the meaningless comebacks and al lthe frustration. Tell me girl when did you know this to be true you say there was months of space between me and you
Regret, i swear will haunt your heart and if not it was nothing from the start. So take your one liners and all your promised lies, tnite we say goodbye and we sever all our ties. Time was the one lie that got me again and again but you were the port in which id never been. You're heart was the lighthouse when I was away at sea and when the waters got rough it was you who deserted me but I hope he was worth it you did it twice before ill keep your battered sails away from my paradised shore.
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The last paragraph is by far the best part. Regret, I swear will haunt your heart and if not it was nothing from the start. That line could be one of those 'bumper sticker' type phrases that people use for years to come. Its catchy and packs so much punch. The metaphors used lightoouse and waters rough and port are fantastic. The beginning seemed only to be the explanation of your last paragraph. Almost as if you wrote the last bit first and then had to give some sort of reason for it so you told a little story. Or maybe perhaps the story was plain but the burns are deeper and when you have revenge on your mind you can say so much more. I liked it.
