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Duval1219
Robert Pipkin
United States, North Carolina, Banner Elk

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My Athena (revised)

She was slowly and sensually unbuttoning my shirt one button at a time, gliding her hands across my chest a little more and more with each button's release. My breathing was becoming labored, but from arousal, from the excitement she was making me feel, not from strenuous activity, at least not yet. The fingers of one of her petite hands were intermingling with strands of my chest hair while the fingers of her other hand would alternate twirling around each of my nipples. She had me weak and wobbly on my legs now, and she knew it. Releasing the last of the buttons, she pulled my shirt fully open. Her hands, so warm and soft, immediately slid up my chest, caressing and kneading it with her fingers. She wrapped her arms around my waist and moved her hands up my back, seducing my whole upper body with her touch.

She brought her hands around to the front, and there at my waist, she began unfastening my belt, slowly and deliberately, as with my shirt. My beautiful goddess moved the zipper down bit by bit, relieving the pressure of the straining hardness in my jeans.

Standing here in this quaint bedroom of her house on this rural country road, the gentle post midnight breeze causing the sheer white curtains of the window to flutter slightly in the moonlight, I reflected back on how we ended up here...

Actually, it had been a set up. I don't do blind dates, and my friends knew that. I'd been tricked, but looking back now, I'm glad I had been. It turned out that my friends were also her friends, and since we were both single, they took it upon themselves and decided it was time we met. The two of us were both conned into meeting them at a local restaurant, neither of us aware the other would be there. When I saw my two friends with this unknown woman beside them, I think I must have covered the lower part of my face with my hand until I could get my slack jaw to realign itself back into it's normal position. She was stunning, absolutely gorgeous, the epitome of the essence of pure natural beauty. Well, at least she was to me, and she still is. Athena incarnate.

I just knew I'd probably say something stupid when I tried to make conversation with her and end up feeling like a consummate fool. But, I was surprised. When we were introduced, I felt completely at ease with her. Imagine that. That was three weeks ago, and we've been dating ever since. We both nurtured a love for music, so we attended concerts. Movies were another of our similar interests. Tonight, after a pleasant dinner, we'd strolled through the mall. Finally, we headed for the movie theater just before the starting time of the feature we had co-selected. We've enjoyed being with each other so much. At least, I think she enjoyed being with me as much as I truly loved being with her...

My attention returned to the present as I felt her sliding my jeans and boxers to the floor. I stepped out of each, and with my foot, slid them across the hardwood floor and out of the way. As she stood back up, I reached for the zipper of her black skirt, but she beat me to it. Swiftly, her skirt and lace French cuts fell to her ankles. I had already removed her silk lavender blouse and matching bra. With both hands, she quickly separated my remaining shirt from my shoulders and arms, then turned me around and pushed me backwards onto the bed. I eased back on the bed using my hands and legs to propel myself as she crawled after me, like a cat stalking it's prey. 'My god, she is so sexy!' I thought to myself as she moved my legs apart so she could crawl entirely up between them.

"I want you so bad," she said. "I need you so much, so very very much!"

I don't think she needed me anymore than I needed her. The time seemed just right, and I guess we'd both anticipated this. Maybe it was the candlelit dinner, the sexy lingerie we'd both stopped to admire in the mall, or the love scenes in the movie we'd seen. Either way, I wanted her now, totally and completely!

With the tips of her fingers against my inner thighs, she teased me while looking at my manhood to see what reaction she was getting. Obviously, she was pleased, as a wry smile crossed her lips. She leaned down and began planting soft kisses on my thighs, my stomach, my abdomen, and also my manhood. Moving up, she straddled my waiting erection and lowered herself onto it. She let out a soft moan, as did I. It felt fantastic, so perfect...so right!

She moved slowly up and down on me at first, then faster as she relaxed herself. The warmth from the inside of her was driving me crazy with desire. I caressed both her breasts as her momentum increased. She held both my hands to her breasts as she moved, grinding herself onto me hungrily. 'Either this was heaven on earth,' I thought, 'or I had died and entered the actual place!' Placing my hands on both of her hips, I pulled her down hard onto me with each of her downward movements. Her moans became more frequent and audibly louder. When she finally reached climax, I felt an intense heat release inside of her, engulfing me.

I rolled her off of me as she was catching her breath and quickly entered her from above. I cradled her neck and lower part of her head in one hand and kissed her lovingly and passionately. The kisses of her full lips were so sweet, sensual, erotic, and words I can't even think of to express. As I thrust myself into her faster, deeper, a heat from my loins began to rise to the surface. I didn't want to stop it, and neither did she. With her hands on my hips, she pulled me deeper into her as she thrust herself up to meet me. I couldn't contain myself. We simultaneously exploded in dual earth-shaking orgasms and collapsed holding tight to each other.

"I love you!" I said to her.

"Well, it's about time you said that," she replied, then added, "I love you too!"

I can't describe how I felt when I heard her say that. Some things there just are no words for. I do know I slept very little that night, due to fear that I'd wake up later and find that it had all been a dream. I was totally content to hold her in my arms as she slept with her head against my chest while being mesmerized by the moonlight shining through the fluttering curtains...

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chrispavey Comment by: chrispavey - 2006-12-16 16:29
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It's a great read Robert. I loved the intermittent flashbacks between the current scene and the events that transpired beforehand. The only part I felt could be improved was the first paragraph. It had some awkward adjectives, "her petite hands" and "her warm hands" Perhaps you could leave the petite and warm out? or if you deem that an important part to the story maybe try and re-arrange the descriptive word putting it toward the end of each of those sentences.

eg. "her hand, so petite, moved...

and you only need three dots when you leave off at the end of a sentence...
TerminationBliss Comment by: TerminationBliss - 2006-12-16 07:02
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I didn't believe you when you said you'd submitted it :P Nice work!
Robert Barlow Comment by: Robert Barlow - 2006-12-15 16:50
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Robert, I agree with the others. You provided excellent description without getting too graphic and destroying the imagination of the reader. Well done. --Robert Barlow
karbearkar63 Comment by: karbearkar63 - 2006-12-09 13:36
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Very tastefully written, don't we all wish it could be this romatic everytime!
Lola0814 Comment by: Lola0814 - 2006-11-21 13:24
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Beautifully and sensually written. Takes the reader right into the author's extremely euphoric scenario...BRAVO!!
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