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simowierdo
Jeannie Zheng
United States, NH, nashua

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Goodbye

I take you for granted,
Thinking you'll always be there.
But when reality lands,
You are no longer here.

Tears fall down my face,
Though I promise not to cry.
The house is full of empty space,
Too empty for me to identify.

Someday I hope to see you again,
But I don't know that for sure.
I hope to bring you back but I can't,
I miss you, now and forever more.

I didn't get to kiss you goodbye,
On your old, wrinkly hand.
I can swear I see you cry.
My heart breaks into tiny specks of sand.

There's nothing good about goodbyes,
That's all I can say for now.
So many empty promises and lies,
Too many for me to figure out.

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nickrazer Comment by: nickrazer - 2008-07-30 04:04
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This truly comes from the heart.
tinaleigh120 Comment by: tinaleigh120 - 2007-01-02 13:36
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this was so sad! I loved it; it was beautiful.
ShatteredDreamer Comment by: ShatteredDreamer - 2006-12-05 12:19
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I'm sorry.

Felt like my last comments (down below) was too light hearted for a serious poem like this.
It's brilliant - but I felt like I was too lighthearted when I re-read it...about the grandmother thing..sorry...
ShatteredDreamer Comment by: ShatteredDreamer - 2006-12-05 12:08
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"The house is full of empty space,
Too empty for me to identify."
were beautiful lines.
I liked how I thought that this poem was about a girlfriend or something, but with the mention of "old, wrinkly hand," it made me think of grandmother etc.

Thanks for a heartfelt read. Would appreciate it if you could comment on my poem "Kicking Paint Cans" (and/or) "Come Out To Play (Romeo)" .. they're both on one page - multitasker =D
Woo!
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