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I'm sorry girl
I didn't know that you loved me
We were friends so long
I didn't know how you felt when you hugged me
I said best friends forever
You said me and you for life
I said our friendship would never end
I had no idea that it would cause so much strife
I had a good feeling around you
But you had a warm feeling around me
Your heart had been torn
And I'm sorry that I didn't see it
You said you loved me
And I said sorry
You said you were fine
But that morning I was really sorry
I go to your house
And see the docs and cops
I break past the barriers into your room
And then my heart just dropped
The walls painted crimson
Even though last night they were teal
I look down at a corpse
In your hands a steel
I watched the ambulance take you away
And I noticed a letter
I opened it and looked
It said: I wish I were better
I loved you
And you couldn't return it when I was alive
I had no reason to live from then on
I knew thereafter I just wanted to die
I was so stupid
I knew I had no chance
You had your eyes on someone else
Even when we went to the dance
I read the letter
And fell out and cried
All this time you loved me
I said no and for that you died
This was my fault
And there is only one way to solve
In my water tonight
I'll let the pill disolve
I didn't know how much I loved you
And now you're gone
Well now I'll end this
And finish my life's song
We can be together forever
And I can end this with a happy sigh
As I lay down in my bed tonight
And I'll see you when I die
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Shit, that was beautiful ! =D
It had a Romeo and Juliet feel to it, especially the last stanza.
Can't even tell you how brilliantly you envoked the emotion in this --I actually forgot that I was reading ... lol ... language was simple and flowing but your choice of words were still really perfect and you cut the thread and sewed up the cloth (managed to get the thread right through the eye of the needle), and you ended up with this ravaged and heartbreaking and honest and bittersweet and heartwrenchingly realistic brutal piece of work.
It felt like high school romance ("You had your eyes on someone else
Even when we went to the dance") but you had the strong emotionsand stuff.
Dude. This. Rawks. Some. Sawks.
Keep this up and I may come to read your suff every day! *laughs*
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