The place for writers: Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world. Learn how other writers are doing it. |
|
 |
 |
 |
| |
Orphan Bird
This
what I feel for you
is immortal
it's eternal
Goes beyond
any word
I hold it in my hand
Like an orphan bird.
Feed it hourly
with my attention.
I nurture it
and it's fragile beak
But it doesn't ask anything of me.
Though it opens and closes it's beak
Expectantly.
It is sad in it's captivity.
It doesn't need anything
But I want to give it
all I have
Regurgitate
Saturate
Drown it
with all that I can give
to make it live.
It's warm heart beats
moss soft in my palm
I feel it's heat
and our pulses
ticking in unison
as one clock's cog.
It is tiny
compared to my life-sized clumsiness
But I need it
more than it needs me
I want to tell it
not to be afraid
we are in this together
for the long haul.
But it fidgets
like an agitated
jumping bean
my tight clasp
it's trampoline.
It's feathers sticking
in desperation
mt perspiration
and I wonder
if
I will be strong enough to release it
a little
not smother
it's face under a pillow
of euthanasia
But I know
Yes I know
If my little bird
I uncover
and let it go
It will return to me
and grow.
Want to comment on this Short Stories?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Short Stories and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
|
 |
|
[Back to top]
|
|
|
|
Dear Jewels,
Wow...this one's a keeper. A new simile in a world of comparisons....I don't recall love (and attachment and protectiveness, etc.) ever being compared to an orphan bird, so points on that alone.
Also, the rapid, breathless, accelerating pace, words per line and delivery almost physically make us feel as breathless as the "bird" while we struggle to keep up.
Cool!
James |
|
|
The imagery here is hurting my throat and making my eyes well up. I suppose we all are insatiable hatchlings when in the most feverish stages of love.
Feed it hourly
with my attention.
I nurture it
and it's fragile beak
But it doesn't ask anything of me.
Though it opens and closes it's beak
Expectantly.
It is sad in it's captivity.
It doesn't need anything
But I want to give it
all I have
Some damn bird's screeching for it's mother in my backyard as I write this... |
 |
Comment by: dnieman - 2007-02-23 23:35
|
|
| as i read this it felt like the person holding the bird was in need of a friend. almost as if by trying to help the bird, maybe he/she was helping herself. perhaps the bird did not need any help, or perhaps it did. all to often in this world we live in, those who need help the most, resent it the most. |
 |
Comment by: izzye - 2007-02-07 06:25
|
|
Brilliant, i was lost in your plight.
How difficult must it be to care for something so fragile and small and to inevitably let it go, to send it out into the big bad world that hurt it and sent to your caring hands? I really love this it has a tortured bitter sweet feel to it. X |
|
|
| It's impossible to force anything to love you. Yet to be in love, is to willfully donate yourself to loves captivity. |
| 1 2 Next |
|
 |
 |
 |
|
|
|
| | Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com |
|
 |
 |
 |
| |
Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster. Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S | | |